Listen Up!Please critique my writing that I submitted recently.
Yup, that's it. I'm desperate for some critiquing.
You are thereIn the dark depths of my heart,You are there
you are there above anyone else,
no one dare step inside,
for you mend my soul,
no one dare touch you,
for when you laugh, you are like the bright moon.
Even when I sleep,
The love in the air keeps me awake.
Even when I sleep,
I know you are there.
What is this love, what passion,
What is this so dear to my heart that I grab so tight,
I twist and turn at night to find out,
You have changed the way I think,
You have caught me, I have
Another ChanceGood things have passedAnother Chance
Lively hood gone.
Rewind the clock.
I keep on seeing How I lost it with my own hands.
My dreams are behind a curtain hiding from me.
How could I have high hopes ofr the future when I didn't know what will happen
And then on the way to my destination I lost what I had.
The world seems like a desolate place, when you know what you had.
Stricken from its beauty when you realize what you lost.
It will be better tomorrowI believed and sometimes still do, that one shouldn't bother about the joyful momentsIt will be better tomorrow
because despair is soon to arrive. many others close to me,
often contradict my opinions. They don't think to
worry about the bad days, because a good day is just around the corner.
Sometimes, it takes mores struggle and dedication to remind yourself that things
get better, than it takes to give in. Indeed, the sunshine of happiness does come
following the clouds of despair but the clouds come again
and it continues to rain. Quite a few times,
A simple drinkI'm sorry my friend, I had to go.A simple drink
Your drunken state was such a show.
You sat in the front, I in the back
and when driving, it was blood you spat.
Could you not see the car ahead,
or my life in the back seat?
Now you sit at my funeral, my dear friend.
Isn't this such a treat?
For the guilty pieces you try to mend,
All show the death of your best friend.
Daily Needs
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Stars lay like yellow pollen
That from a flower has fallen;
And single stars I saw
Crossing themselves in awe;
Some stars in sudden fear
Fell like a falling tear.
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~Start acting normal, that's already crazy enough.~
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K ♥ K ㇸ_ㇸ ~♪
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~Start acting normal, that's already crazy enough.~
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The secret of creativity is knowing how to hide your sources - Albert Eistein ♦♣♠♥
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~Start acting normal, that's already crazy enough.~
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+Unbearable Reality+
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~Start acting normal, that's already crazy enough.~
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+Unbearable Reality+
OMMGGGGGGGGGGGGGG
THANKYOU SO MUCHHHH KYAAAAAAAAAAA
KEII LOVES IT ^0^
(lol. keii couldnt wait till christmas, k? Dl)
THANKYOUUUUUUUU.
KEII GONNA USE THEM LIKE....
FOREVERZZZZZ.
ANDAND
DRAW LIKE..... LOTS OF PICTURES FOR YOU WITH THEM.
THANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOUUUUUU.
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"WHAT!? A llama!? He's supposed to be dead!"
"Yeah... weird. o.o"
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